Enjoyment is a kind of thing which can be found in many ways. Some people think that young people are carefree and live their life to fullest. While others think that older people enjoy their life more due to their experience in life. In my opinion, young people are more lively, enthusiastic and full of enery to be able to enjoy life. I feel so for the following two reasons.
First of all, young people do not have major responsibilities in life. For that they have their elder ones to guide and support them. This helps in order to achieve that happiness without missing any important moments. This reason of mine is compelling for the same. For example, one day i and my family decided to go out for a movie at nearby cinema theatre. Although everthing was planned, my father received a phone call from his office and he had to rush to his office as it was urgent. So, this made my dad to miss out on such a happy outing, all the fun and also important moments which are precious in life. This helps us understand that elder people have some unavoidable responsibilites which they cannot abandon and hence, tend to sometimes miss the enjoyable moments of life.
Furthermore, the fact that young people have more energy and strength gives them an advantage to have fun. Having said that, many people love playing outdoor games like soccer, tennis, cricket and this makes them happy and satisfied. As we get older our strength gradually decreases and the same sport that we once enjoyed playing with our teammates is now no longer a part of your schedule. This makes some people to think that they are loosing onto things they enjoy. I can explain my statement better with an self experienced example. A man used to play soccer with me and my group when we were in our school days and he was very passionate towards soccer. He often used to tell us how much he loved soccer watching and how much he enjoyed soccer while playing. However, after 3 to 4 years when we were in our undergraduate programs we still used to play soccer as we enjoyed it alot but the man could not play even though his heart and soul wanted to play as he had grown older and had severe heart conditions which restricted him from playing with us. So, this shows that young people are more physical stronger to be able have more enjoyment in life.
In conclusion, young people have all the required time and factors to enjoy without any worries of the future which would be filled with responsibilities. Minimal responsibilities juxtaposed with maximum strength and energy makes young people lively, more enjoyable, and fun loving. Hence, younger people can enjoy life more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, thus, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63481953291 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45153895118 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507430997877 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5542432783 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.32 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324374670911 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105212832787 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982437361777 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228258037068 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880040083197 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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