Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, the effect of young people on their society has been matter of dispute. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether today, it is correct that they have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Some people possess the conviction that this statement is completely wrong whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that it is exactly the fact. I personally contend that young people have influence on the future of their society. The following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that the advancement of technologies plays a paramount role in the decisions of countries. In other word, these technologies and its development have a considerable impact on the society and therefore, can affect the decisions of politicians, economists and people who are in authorities. By way of illustration, take cell phones. At the first time when the cell phones and their abilities were defined, the government of my country showed some opposition against that. After some time, by the pressure of society, notably the pressure of youth, they are forced to withdraw from their decisions.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that it in undeniable that old people who are in authority, want to maintain their power and their decisive role. On the other hand, young people are more vibrant and energetic and also they have a host of ideas and plans. The history of societies has demonstrated that youth can conquer in this competition. Indeed, although old people who have power resist some changes, young people could wipe out this resistance and create their desirable future. But they have remembered that if they lose their hopes and creativity, they would be defeated in this rally. The have to be secluded and persistent in their decisions and actions.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only youth have influence on the future of their societies, but also they can play a key role in the field of their expertise. However, they should be hopeful and vibrant and do not surrender among some undesirable happenings. These are the keys of prosperity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81767785308 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1615326152 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.210526316 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216164340257 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684009121703 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688570253035 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137138770721 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920854035564 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.