Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, by advancement of technology and development of different devices, we can see some unprecedented repercussions. These improvements have had some advantages and disadvantages in our lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether nowadays, since people are involved in doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Some people possess the conviction that it is a true statement whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that contrary to popular belief, nowadays, people do more things well. I personally contend that demerits of these technologies and devices in our works overweight their merits. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that in today's world, there are manifold things that interrupt us. Indeed, they play a disruptive role in our lives. In the past, when you went to an office, you saw that employees were working. But now if you go to that office, you would see that those employees are working with their cell phones, they are involved in some entertaining works such as surfing the internet, playing games and so on. These works have prevented people doing carrying out their duties and tasks. As a result, although these entertainments are enjoyable for employees, those would not permit people to concentrate on their works and assignments and have reduced their efficiency. The rate of improvement of many offices show this fact.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that from the psychological point of view, human beings can concentrate on few works at a moment. Thus, if they get involved in other tasks, they could not utilize the whole of their potential. To shed light on this issue, suppose that you want to attend a class in the morning and you have to do lots of assignments. On the other hand, you have to take an exam in the evening. Undoubtedly, you cannot concentrate on your class and the thought of exam interrupt you. Thus, you have attended the class, but in fact, you have not learned anything from this class. We can see this problem in all places and circumstances. In addition, economic problems intensify it. All people strive to earn enough money to have a convenient life. Therefore, they have to do different works. This can be one of the most important sources of mentioned dispute.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that although we access to different technologies and devices, we cannot focus on our works and escalate our efficiency. There are various reasons for that such as existence of some obsessions in our lives and also some novel entertainments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
..., since people are involved in doing so many different things, they do very few things well. S...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 905, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...important sources of mentioned dispute. In conclusion, contemplating all the afo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04904051173 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87646143661 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520255863539 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6891121906 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0769230769 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0384615385 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88461538462 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250336601487 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648127433802 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827707231792 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144333583875 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846966482404 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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