Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Throughout history, working and its conditions have been one of the most important and influential matters in human beings' lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether it is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Some people possess the conviction that working for long hours and fewer days is a better choice whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that working for shorter hours and more days is more convenient. I personally contend that its more satisfying that work for long hours and fewer days. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this idea that if we work in fewer days, we would have some times to allocate to other works. For example, we can spend our time on reading books, hanging out, travelling to countryside and camping and so on. To exemplify, take my personal experience as a real case. Two years ago, I was a civil engineer in a company. At first, I had to work five days a week for five hours each day. Afterwards, by some changes in the schedule of that company, I was required to work three days, but for longer hours. By this change, I had more leisure time. I allocate my spare time on socializing with my friends, learning French language and also travelling and camping. It was absolutely enjoyable for me to have such unprecedented freedom of action. Had this circumstances never been occurred, I would not experience a host of things.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that from a psychological point of view, if people have obliged to work every day, even for few hours, they would be mentally involved in that work. In fact, in their leisure time they ponder to their assignments and related problems. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in my country, show that in days on which people work on some subjects, spontaneously they think about their problems in work all the day. Therefore, they would not withdraw these problems and as a result, they cannot have a good time with their family and friends.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only working three days for long hours can be more enjoyable, it can provide invaluable time for other activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this id...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80778032037 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7122198171 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503432494279 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6250786163 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.05 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441923780413 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120779557966 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155144942465 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26661611676 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161633201764 0.0645574589148 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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