Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
In today's world, many parents emphasize on the education of their children, while the future job of teenagers in many cases is of paramount importance. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether encouraging the teenage children to take a part-time job is an appropriate work or it is not beneficial. Some people possess the conviction that the former can help teens for adult life whereas others hold exactly the opposite view and allege that this opinion can be harmful for the education of teenage children. I personally contend that, although taking part-time job has its’ merits and demerits, it's advantages overweigh disadvantages. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that taking part-time jobs can assist in making socialization and learning how to communicate with other peoples. The communication with peoples with different positions and skills, leads to making friendship and work groups which can be very useful in the future. By way of illustration, I have a personal experience in this area. When I was studying in the last semester of college, I attended to an architecture office as a trainee. This corporation had a friendly atmosphere and I learnt lots of skills in it and after concluding the college, they absorbed me as an employee.
The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified is that taking part-time job has considerable effect on understanding personal tendencies, popularities, talents and abilities and as a consequence, it can help a teenager to choose his or her future field of work wisely. Concentration to this issue is significantly important because if someone be well aware of detailed circumstances of a specific job before taking that job as a principal source of earning money and subsisting on it, he or she would make the best decision for future. In addition, working along with education results in making a proper resume and preparing some bases for future works in international and well-known corporations.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that the encouraging of teenage children to take a part-time job can be absolutely beneficial. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the parents as well as paying attention to the education of their children, take a look on the future of them in the work market.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...sorbed me as an employee. The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified ...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...nificantly important because if someone be well aware of detailed circumstances of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, look, regarding, so, well, whereas, while, in addition, in brief, as well as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18826405868 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16125668011 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547677261614 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.1364368332 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.466666667 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361682961112 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107963338602 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721949047687 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222052205216 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750012551368 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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