Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, having a good job and earning enough money have been hopes of all men and women. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether in the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Some people possess the conviction that it is a true statement whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that nowadays, finding a secure job is easier. I personally contend that because of some reasons in the past it was easier to find a secure job which has a successful future. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that after the industrial revolution and a heyday of all industries, now we deal with economic depression. In other words, many countries experience a tough condition of recession along with inflation. This condition is significantly dangerous for the economy. As a result, in most fields, there are not safe jobs which guarantee the future of your occupational life. Therefore, every day we can see people who have fired from their job and are seeking a new career. To shed light on this issue, take my personal experience as a real example. Two years ago, I worked as a civil engineer in a project of building a 58 story tower. Due to the economic problems and lack of money, they cease the project. As a consequence, all of the engineers and laborers are obliged to seek another job.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that nowadays, owing to the increasing of population, all careers have been immersed. In the past, people did many works. For example, my grandfather was a carpenter. But, when he needs money he worked in bakery. In today’s world, the condition is changed. There are myriad of skills and expertise and all of them have surplus workers. In addition, there is a horrible competition for jobs. Indeed, they are immersed. thus, people cannot do those careers. As a result, every day the rate of unemployment increase. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in our country, show that in comparison with twenty years ago, the rate of unemployment escalates about seven percent. If there are safe jobs, we would not have such a high rate of unemployment.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that in the past not only finding a job was easier, but also people could find jobs which they were confident that they have a successful future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 809, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ey cease the project. As a consequence, all of the engineers and laborers are obliged to s...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...on for jobs. Indeed, they are immersed. thus, people cannot do those careers. As a r...
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Line 5, column 845, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have such a high rate of unemployment. In conclusion, contemplating all the afo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9131403118 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83265395923 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556792873051 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4041453773 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7037037037 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6296296296 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14814814815 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231286327796 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485477667337 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789160865141 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144119317317 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965397983315 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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