Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, the future jobs of children have been a contentious issue among families. In the modern area, because of improvement of technologies which engendered novel and various jobs, this dilemma become more complicated. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether children should choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs, otherwise, choose jobs that are different from their parents' job. Some people possess the conviction that the former is the best choice, whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the latter is more fruitful. I personally contend that pursuing the parents' vocation has some merits which overweigh its’ demerits. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that choosing father or mother's job as a way for subsisting on in the future might has been more prosperous than commencing a new job. Parents probably have taken actions which pave the way for development of their children. By way of illustration, one of my best friends whose father is a chief of a civil engineer corporation, took a decision to continue his education in civil engineering and take a master degree in earthquake engineering. These days he works in his father's cooperation and newly I here that he gets a promotion in his work. Though, not only this election does not restrict him, but also accelerate his development.
The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified is that all jobs have their advantages and disadvantages. By keep going the ways of parents, children can be well informed about the priorities, features, and circumstances of considered job. In addition, the earning of jobs is absolutely important. In general, children are aware of economic condition of their family and as a consequence, they know how much they can earn in the future. therefore, by with regard to these points, they can aptly elect the best choice for their job in the future.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that continuing parents' jobs could be an appropriate decision. But, it should be considered that although this choice can be helpful and leads to good results, parent must be rational and permit their children to choose a way that they think is the best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 642, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... I personally contend that pursuing the parents vocation has some merits which overweig...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...lerate his development. The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified ...
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Line 5, column 452, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...w how much they can earn in the future. therefore, by with regard to these points, they c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, in brief, in general, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12718204489 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87893113431 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561097256858 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6569103558 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.222222222 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350257418866 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103534192075 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108434793778 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205414227052 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644830869955 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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