Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, there have been a long-lasting dispute among the privacy of people and its margins. By the advancement of technology and proliferation of media, this issue become warmer than the past. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether or not the famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy that they have now. Some people possess the conviction that this statement is true whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that it is not a case and nowadays, famous people are satisfied with their conditions. I personally contend that this statement exactly express what they need to improve in their works and also have a calm life. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from a psychological point of view, as people have more peaceful life, they could have more concentration on their works and as a result, they would be more prosperous. In other words, if there are some disruptive interferences in the famous people's life, they might lose their focus on their tasks. To shed light on this issue, consider a British football player, George Best. With admission of a host of experts, he was a gifted football player. There was an adage about him that says "Pele good, Maradona better, George best". But this talented football player, lose his concentration on football due to media interference and never could achieve a pinnacle that others thought he could.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that famous people, like others, want to have privacy in their lives. In fact, privacy is a pre-requisite of a good life. But some people, especially some media, don not respect to this right. They intervene in the subtle events of famous people and if they object media's behavior, they would say this is the freedom of media and speech and we are entitled to do in this way. To exemplify, we can surf the internet and watch the images and videos of celebrities in restaurants, ceremonies and so on. Not only other people and media do not respect to the privacy of well-known people, but also everyday this demeanor is aggravated and their disruptive interference escalate.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that privacy is a basic and fundamental right of anybody and we have to respect to this. Consequently, it is highly recommended that media allow that celebrities have their private lives and do not interrupt them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...is often raised regarding this issue is whether or not the famous entertainers and athletes de...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...g reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 2, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... disruptive interferences in the famous peoples life, they might lose their focus on th...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... privacy of well-known people, but also everyday this demeanor is aggravated and their d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04783599089 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83028489843 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514806378132 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2287517265 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233469339278 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704441948891 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792622459727 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149921647655 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630606739413 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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