Some people say people taking risks can be more successful than people who are careful and cautious. What is your opinion? Please give specific details and examples in your answer.
Throughout history, there have been long-lasting disputes among scientists about reasons of prosperity and defeat. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether people who take risks can be more successful than who are careful and cautious. Some people possess the conviction that this is a true sentence whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that being careful and caution in decisions are the key of success. I personally contend that most of the prosperous people have taken risks at the first step of their works. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from the psychological point of view, people who take risk are more courageous than who are too careful. In other words, they do not afraid of defeat. They are tenacious and strive to do the best in their works, but if they do not be successful, for any reason, they would examine another ways and do not surrender. To shed light on this issue, take my personal experience as a real example. When I was undergraduate student in university, I wanted to start a job, although I had lots of assignments and projects in university. At first, It was significantly hard for me to manage my works. I was in a tough situation, but I was determined. By passing time, I could overcome most of my problems and now, I have a business for which others admire me.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that making decisions carefully and cautiously is very good, but it should not be disruptive. We have to consider all aspects of works and finally, decide whether it would be successful. Most of the people who are prosperous have taken risks. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in my country, show that more than 90 percent of prosperous people have taken risks. It is axiomatic that myriad of them have some defeats. They have learned from their defeats and as a result, they conquer the obstacles. Tomas Edison, the well-known inventor is a real example. He did a momentous work after successive defeats.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only most of the successful people have taken risks, they have obliged to take risk. Thus, it is recommended that people believe on themselves and be confident that they can carry out unbelievable works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, well, whereas, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93661971831 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84255241925 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530516431925 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5218385774 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4347826087 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249534100428 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703494455893 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893901062408 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176751151173 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706254403259 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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