Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, various methods of education have been matter of dispute. In the modern era, this argument become more sophisticated. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether or not educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on their electronic devices. Some people possess the conviction that this is a true statement whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that advancement of technology facilitates the education of students. I personally contend that although cell phones, social networking web site and so on have had a host of advantages, they in manifold ways they interrupt the process of education. The following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that increasing pace advancement of technology plays a pivotal role in our lives. One of the most important effects of this development is in the education area. Nowadays, children have been immersed in lots of various facilities and entertainments. They spend much amount of their time playing online games and surfing internet. Therefore, they do not pay enough attention to their education. As a consequence, teachers have absolutely hard work to persuade their students to study and do their assignments.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that from the psychological point of view, spending much time using cell phone, playing games and surfing internet can have detrimental effect on the mind and personality of children. In other words, these technologies prevent growing of students in different realms. Also, spending much time with these devises can contribute to reducing the creativity of students. They cannot propose new ideas in their works and studies. Moreover, they cannot concentrate on a specific issue. Indeed, their brain have not been taught to focus on one subject and ponder about it. These students suffer from these problems and as a result, it is a tough work for their teachers to educate them.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only technologies bring about some problems for us, but also it would be dangerous if we cannot control it. Finally, it is recommended that parents have more control over their children and try to entertain them with other devices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...is often raised regarding this issue is whether or not educating children is more difficult ta...
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Line 1, column 611, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...although cell phones, social networking web site and so on have had a host of advantages...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26835443038 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88412770129 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569620253165 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4991521619 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0952380952 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273840088859 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682629785138 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748291105286 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152003810497 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923653211773 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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