Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world advancement of technology and advent of various media play a prominent role in the upbringing and demeanor of children and young people. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether movies and television have more negative than positive effects on the way young people behave. Some people possess the conviction that programs of television, notably movies, generally, are detrimental to young people whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that its merits overweigh its demerits. I personally contend that disadvantages of television and movies and the influence of them on youth conduct are more than its benefits. The following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that nowadays, media involve people with their unlimited programs. In other worlds, due to the fact that they want to earn more economic benefits as well as have more impact on thoughts and tendencies of people, they are in a contention and struggle to attract more attention and intrigue more popularity. As a result, every day, from morning to late night, host of youth spend their invaluable time on watching movies and so on. As a consequence, most of the youth are lazy and do not struggle for achieving their goals. This laziness and not attending to public exhibit itself in some statistics. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country, show that more than 30 percent of young people are unemployed and most of them do not have any special skill.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that a great number of movies promote a harsh and rude behavior. Indeed, these movies have heroes which deliberately or inadvertently encourage people to be angry and fight with others. This undesirable implication is manifest in the public. In my opinion, had we believed these behaviors have not relation with media, it could be naive. Take my personal experience as an example; I was a teacher in high school for 4 years. I paid attention on my students and discern that releasing new season of popular movies could have unbelievable impact on students. They imitate their hairstyle, gesture and also way of talking to others.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one soon realizes that media have some unpleasant and damaging effects on behavior of youth which overweigh its benefits. Consequently, it is recommended that parents pay more attention to programs and movies which their children watch.
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Suggestion: mind elucidating
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Suggestion:
...of them do not have any special skill. The second rationale behind this opinion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20560747664 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83827636687 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556074766355 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0479357364 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266320833271 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688746381142 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779195046654 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154057865774 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648997435456 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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