Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education of children and youths plays a pivotal role in prosperity of societies. students are the rocks on which societies will be built and the education of them might be the most important task of each government. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities. Some people possess the conviction that this statement is true whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the influence of universities on country is more than schools and as a result, governments should spend more money on universities. I personally contend that it is better that the government invest more money on young children in the schools. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from the psychological point of view, teachers can have more effect on students while they are younger. In other words, whatever students become more mature, the schools and universities would have slighter impact on them. To shed light on this issue, take my personal experience as a real example. In my opinion, the personality of me formed when I entered in school. That time I was seven years old. Teachers taught me virtues and evils. I learned to respect my parents and teachers. In addition to fostering a good breeding, they taught me how to ponder in various things and decide in tough situations and dilemmas. Moreover, they nurture my creativity. All of these works have done when I was under ten years old. Had I not learned these feature from a host of fantastic teachers, I would not have been a successful person in my private and occupational life.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that a large number of students do not enter universities. Most of the students commence a job and business after graduating from the high school. Based on the last demographic statistics conducted in my country, more than 60 percent of students do not pursue their study after their graduation from the high school. Thus, if the government do not spend time and money on students in the school, manifold of them would be deprived of invaluable educations. As a consequence, a large part of the society would suffer from unconsciousness and this trend would continue. Therefore, it is not logical that government just pay attention to the universities and overlook the importance of schools.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only governments should spend a huge amount of money on education of students in schools, but also this work is crucial and they are obliged to help the schools to provide an appropriate environment for thriving of students.
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Suggestion: Students
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00408163265 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91929769672 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502040816327 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5340963267 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.166666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285814255955 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07008448484 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984590012905 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172377819374 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122352523805 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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