Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history the dependence and independence of young people to their parents are in dispute. Some people prefer to has an authority and decides by themselves. On the other hand, some people rather depending on other people and especially parents. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether in today's world people are more depended on their parents or are more independent. Some people possess the conviction that in the modern era people become more independent rather than the past whereas others hold exactly the opposite. I personally contend that human beings, notably young people, are considerably independent. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that in the past post of the young people pursued the job which his father did. In the other words, the young people continued his family work and did not think and pay attention to other jobs. For example, if his father were a peasant he pursued farming. Furthermore, in the recent century, the rate of illiteracy declined significantly. This change displays that young people want to understand and experience more and novel issues and eventually, leads to a point that they do not permit other people to manipulate and control them. By way of illustration, nowadays, young people choose their future profession and do not continue their precedents job. Thus people would be more independent.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that the rate of immigration has an increasing trend. In my view the rate of immigration has a direct correlation with the independence of people. If someone decide to immigrate to other countries, also cities, he wants to become more independent and be in authority in his or her life. The noteworthy and maybe undesirable statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country, show that more than 35 percent of youth inclined toward immigration and go to other countries. Another statistic has shown that more than 70 percent of rural population immigrate to urban areas in recent 20 years.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that these days, young people tend to be more independent than in the past. In my view, this phenomenon not only is not an unpleasant event, but also could have desirable consequences in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'have'.
Suggestion: have
...s are in dispute. Some people prefer to has an authority and decides by themselves....
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
... the independence of people. If someone decide to immigrate to other countries, also c...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate to urban areas in recent 20 years. In brief, contemplating all the aforemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, for example, in brief, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17359413203 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89044299729 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535452322738 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0255833971 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.761904762 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222568489874 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727914424349 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719683656324 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133699270683 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965408207832 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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