If you were the leader of the country, what kind of policy would you use to succeed?
1. Creating job for unemployed people
2. Develop agriculture and reduce food prices
3. Develop Housing
Throughout history, the role of leaders and governments in the development of countries and their responsibility through the life of people have been matter of dispute. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is which measures governments should implement for their public. Should they create job for unemployed people, develop agriculture and reduce food prices or develop housing? Some people possess the conviction that governments should assist in thriving people through different educations and generation of various job positions whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that leaders should help people to have more convenient life through providing some amenities and subsidies. I personally contend that governments have to upgrade the abilities of people and provide a host of job positions for them. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from the psychological point of view, people appeal to work and earn money on themselves. In fact, they do not want to be at the mercy of governments. They want to stand on their feet. For this purpose, they should have some crucial abilities. Governments should help them to acquire these abilities and be adroit. In addition, government should provide job opportunities for these people. By this way, both of the government and people would be beneficiary. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in my country, shows that the most important concern of youths between 20 and 30 years old is the finding an appropriate job. Thus, governments should resolve this problem.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that in the contemporary era, never ever governments which tend to impose supportive policies have been prosperous. These policies always contribute to collapse of their economy. As a result of these policies, the private sectors of society have been weak and weak and eventually, it leads to the inflation along with recession of economy. To shed light on this issue, take my country experience as a real example. Ten years ago government decided to build thousands of houses for poor families in order to eradicate the poverty. This policy has had horrible effects in our economy. Although many people have their own home now, the expenditure of them has soared and they become poorer than the past. If the government appointed more appropriate economic policies, these terrible repercussions would never be occurred.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only governments should interfere in economy by enforcing some tariffs and subsidies, but also they have to impose free market policies. On the other hand, they should encourage engendering new jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...g reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36363636364 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9041650731 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551948051948 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1242013387 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.12 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.48 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119753316791 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388533309091 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808730129215 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668461420334 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617697067587 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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