Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any shadow of doubts, having interaction with others in the society, and taking part in crucial decision in the community, are one of the prominent trends and needs which are embedded in individuals' spirit, particularly youth. Some people are inclined towards that adult have more contribution in society decisions, while others take a radically different conviction and believe that juvenile are not as mature as enough to participate in not only their fate, but also their society. I do find the idea of the former group more in accordance with that of mine. To support my stance, in the course of this essay, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoints.
To begin with, in today modern world, the awareness of people in general and youth in particular, have been increased thank to wide access in media among them. Thus the level of participation of adults in general activities has been increased. Needless to say, televisions, movies, the internet and newspapers, the utmost important means of broadcasting the latest news and events, have more fans among the young people. In this way, they will be able to aware of the conviction of their prominent characters such as president and mayor, and are inclined to support one group to lead their society in flourishing. In addition, they are inspired with their peers to have more pronounced effect on their future. For example, my cousin who are a high school student, are a profound member of a political group in my town. He believes that he is responsible to his country's future, and his utmost attempt is to lead the society to the zenith. It is controvertibly axiomatic that galloping progress inspires juveniles to be more concerned about their community's future.
Another reason which deserves to say some words here is that, attitude of new generation has been changed. It is crystal clear that our generation's parents pay more attention to their children's ideas and perspectives. I mean, parents are interested in be aware of their children's standpoints and adjust their family's headway according their children's demands. To illustrate my idea, I would like to reveal some statistics results. The results of a survey which has been conducted recently in my country indicate that families are more child-orientated than before. Ergo, this concept actually paves the way to be more favorable climate for adults and provide more opportunities for them to take part in crucial decision of milestone events not only their own life, but also their society. In the light of these arguments, hardly can anyone deny the influence of young people's on our generation's society.
In brief, contemplating all aforementioned reasons, I believe that in the light of high-tech and modern technology gadgets and altering the attitude of family, young people have more bearing on society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ank to wide access in media among them. Thus the level of participation of adults in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, i mean, in addition, in brief, in general, in particular, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12258064516 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84700319933 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529032258065 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0927675387 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.1 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115121565021 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361629746527 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333970045421 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780370595511 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265897855824 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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