Do you agree or disagree? Having a job in which you work with other people is better than having a job in which you work alone.
Personally, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, I care about working efficiency a lot, and working with multiple people can help me become extremely efficient in my work. To elaborate, when I was working in an IT company two years ago, I participated in a programming group of 4 people. Therefore, when my boss told us to do some programming works, I only need to deal with a quarter of the task because the task could be split into four sections, and it took us only 5 days to finish the whole work. Moreover, whenever I had some problems with my task, such as not knowing how to write programs using a specific programming language, I could reach out to my partner for help, meaning that I might have my questions answered in less than 10 minutes. Apparently, working with others can boost my working efficiency to a great extent. Nonetheless, if I did the job alone, I could only rely on myself whenever I encountered some difficulties. Eventually, I might spend more than a month accomplishing my tasks.
In addition, I place an emphasis on safety a lot, and working with colleagues together can guarantee my safety. To be more specific, when I was studying in high school, I was the leader of the hiking club, and my instructor required me to do reconnaissance on a mountain called Yan-Ming-Shan. Unfortunately, we encountered heavy rain during the reconnaissance. What's worse, we did not find any convenient stores or lounges on the mountain. Thankfully, I brought several members from the hiking club along with me. Therefore, we all had enough food and drink to overcome the rain. Yet, if I had done the job all by myself, I might have been severely injured, or, in the worst case, lost my life. Evidently, taking a job which I worked with numerous people can prevent me from running into an irreversible danger.
Last but not least, I focus on getting a good reputation, and obtaining a job in which I can work with several employees helps me get a positive image. For example, my cousin worked in TSMC, the most prominent engineering company in Taiwan, in a team of 20 people. Although my cousin was not a skillful engineer, most members of his team graduated from prestigious universities, such as NTU. Also, most of them had been working in prestigious companies for tens of years. Eventually, he procured an extremely good reputation from his family members and friends. Nevertheless, my sister was a knowledgeable and experienced engineer, yet she worked alone in a start-up company called Osprey. As a result, she did not gain a favorable reputation as my cousin did.
In conclusion, I maintain that having a job where I can work with other people is better than having a personal job. This is because I focus a lot on efficiency, safety, as well as reputation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75152749491 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97895327688 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529531568228 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.080781136 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7307692308 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8846153846 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255654952914 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721738888674 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931183804928 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167427338006 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907991206941 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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