Do you agree or disagree? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Finding jobs has become of great importance in the competitive populous world where we live. In this line of thought, some are of the opinion that people now shouldn’t hesitate in choosing the offered jobs, whereas others stand on the other side of the continuum, stating that it is more advantageous for individuals to wait untill they can find their suitable jobs. Personally, I concur with the former group because of two main reasons on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, choosing a secure job as soon as possible will eventually lead to more significant success in the future. To be more specific, individuals shouldn’t waste their time by waiting for their dream jobs to suddenly appear; contrarily, it would be more beneficial for them to take their first steps toward their proffessional careers by choosing the first secure jobs that gets available for them. It is because by doing so, they would start to strengthen their proffessional resume while anticipating more satisfying jobs to apply in. As an example, three years ago I applied for an internship in a company which didn’t really make me excited, since the company was small and also they didn’t pay to their interns. But it was surprising that after 6 months working in that company and participating in three projects which helped me learn a lot, I could get employed in a high-paying company because of my new resume. Hadn’t I worked in that unwelcome company, for sure I wouldn’t have been able to even get invited for the interview of such a big company.
Secondly, waiting for the dream job will gradually decrease the chance of getting even a mediocre job and will eventually lead to unemployment. Indeed, as humans we are forgetful creatures and this becomes a significant factor when we choose to wait for our proper jobs, gradually paling the fresh knowledge in our minds. Not to mention also the rapid changes of the technology which makes it easy to find our skills completely useless after a year or two. To shed light on this, as a computer engineer, if I don’t keep pace with the new technology evolving each year in this field of expertise, certainly all of my current knowledge will be useless; since every year lots of new programming languages and frameworks emerge which all of the companies add them to their requirements. Thus, it would be a better choice for the individuals to start their proffessions with their current skills rather than waiting to forget them all or letting them become old-school approaches nobody needs anymore.
In conclusion, the benefits of choosing a job as soon as possible overweight those of waiting to find a satisfying job. It is because it helps the person start pursuing his career and reach to success faster as well as it avoids the inevitable forgetting which comes after a long time of unemployment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90368852459 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78666826542 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522540983607 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.497107522 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.5625 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268358957167 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883920210578 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783689529154 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151673067141 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066389452364 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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