Do you agree or disagree? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Modernization has been always a demanding challenge in many part of world. In term of working, it is suggested that career is important part of human life. Whether or not people ought to choose safe duty or pleasure jobs is controversial. According what I generally believe, having protected career is more important than satisfy job, because opportunity of safe job is limited and with safe job human can learn skill.
The main reasons why I believe that safe career is most important of safe job is because chance of secret job is bounded. To elaborate on my point, since number of people who need proper job are increasing, it is important to have safe jobs with fixed salary. In other word, in this age people really need money to attain goal and continuing life. A significant example that strikes my mind is about my life. When my brother graduated from university, he really wanted suitable jobs. After several time he was able to find secret jobs, but he did not pleasure feel about career. In this situation have safe jobs is impotent not satisfying about job.
In addition, I believe that people with certain jobs, after sometimes they find comfortable sense for duty. In my opinion, employer with safe jobs not only gain experience but also learn skill. Therefore, they can use this experience for starting own company and jobs. Owing to having valuable knowledge, they would have success company. A quite clear example would be my friends' business. When my friend wanted start work, she went to Barezz Company. She did not like jobs, but it was safe career. Thus, she decided work at Barezz and gain experience and skill. After 5 years, she could stablish her own association and she is really success person.
To conclude, I agree hold the opinion that protected career is best choice for having duty. In this age competition for attain safe job is higher than past; as result, it is significant to have safe jobs. Also, people can gain experience and earn skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'many parts'.
Suggestion: many parts
...as been always a demanding challenge in many part of world. In term of working, it is sug...
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Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...career is important part of human life. Whether or not people ought to choose safe duty or ple...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'several times'.
Suggestion: several times
..., he really wanted suitable jobs. After several time he was able to find secret jobs, but he...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s they find comfortable sense for duty. In my opinion, employer with safe jobs not...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... hold the opinion that protected career is best choice for having duty. In this age com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82991202346 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47971101686 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.083437844 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6086956522 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8260869565 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04347826087 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216642218887 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649525758552 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656959388302 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1498019543 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249197539691 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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