Do you agree or disagree?
Kranti
Kranti Kadel
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
No one can deny that there is both positive and negative aspects of using smart devices for children. Some people argue that technology has limit the innovation power of children. They cite technology decrease the children ability to concentrate and could limit academic process, and makes them less critical thinker. However, I strongly disagree with these people, and believe that kids can be more creative than kids in the past were, for a number of reasons. I will support my viewpoint with two reasons in subsequent paragraph.
To begin with, utilizing technology devices would help children to have knowledge in different fields. I have to admit that, my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by own personal experience. For instance, my little brother spent most of his time on You-tube this made me curious of what he watch, thus, I opened his history record on Youtube, and found that he interested in physics. Afterwards, he made escavator by using woods and papers. It is importance to utilize technology devices by young people because technology helps to make young people proactive and boost their brain to invent a new things. Thus, using a smart devices help young to have knowledge of diverse field.
Furthermore, numerous applications that exist on the internet helps kids to learn programming. For example, drawing from my own experience, when I was 10 years old. I participated in the competition and I made a robot that could assist disabled people, and bring them medicines. It is possible due to goggle. I used to exposer and seek for help, learned how to use Java and Arduino for programming my machine. It is certainty why I am sure that without technology could be less creative. Thus, various programming on the social media, and goggle helps to make children more innovative.
To sum up, the issue of whether modern technology has made children less critical thinker and innovative or not is complex. Some have suggested that technology has made children less innovative because they limit their time on academic and wasted a time by playing videos games which deteriorate their critical thinking brains. Nevertheless, I still contend that technology makes children more creative because it improves life skills, enhance individual learning and makes children to learn in the adverse condition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'limited'.
Suggestion: limited
.... Some people argue that technology has limit the innovation power of children. They ...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...ou-tube this made me curious of what he watch, thus, I opened his history record on Y...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...e and boost their brain to invent a new things. Thus, using a smart devices help young...
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Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...ist on the internet helps kids to learn programming. For example, drawing from my own exper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15183246073 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74335557949 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552356020942 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5254034389 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7142857143 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1904761905 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205568393185 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554463709404 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520639407048 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129011068129 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648427421125 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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