Do you agree or disagree?
Most people think that some important problems can be solved by themselves or by thier families, and thus it is almost not necessary to refer to the government.
People always try to find the most efficient way to cope with problems, nowadays a new discussion over whether people should turn to the government for help when they are solving problems has been triggered. In my opinion, people should deal with their problems based on relevant laws and regulations of the government.
Firstly, laws and regulations are significant for international students. It is difficult for students who only have academic knowledge to apply for better school. To be more specific, if students want to accept advanced education abroad, they need to learn regulations of the government first, without which their knowledge is useless. For instance, I have been learning transporting laws since I determined to study abroad. I learned from politics that working and experimental experiences are preferred by foreign governments and can even help prolong students’ residential periods. So, every holiday during university, I focused on learning practical skills and tried to find proper internships and scientific subjects that related with my major. As a result, I successfully convinced the admission teacher that I had enough ability to fulfill all requirements with my abundant experiences.
Meanwhile, it is necessary for employees to learn politics directly related with their salaries. From United Nation’s statistics, more than half of employees cannot tell how many taxes they should pay, and they earned less money than the other people. From the research we can conclude that by knowing politics about wages, employees could find themselves the most economic job, which can make them become wealthier. There is an example about my cousin. His salary consisted of fundamental wages and bonus, and these two parts were usually transferred to his bank account together his taxes were calculated according to the sum of these two parts. However, according to the government’s regulation that employees only need to hand in taxes based on their basic salaries. After learning that, my cousin demanded his company to transfer his salary separately, which decreased his taxes and helped him to save up more money.
In conclusion, when meeting problems, both students and employees should pay more attentions to relevant regulations, which may help them go through their difficulties.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to transport'.
Suggestion: to transport
...less. For instance, I had been learning transporting laws and school regulations since I det...
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Line 5, column 591, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...for him by which my cousin was refused. Finally he learned about the government adverti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.265625 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86751573394 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559375 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6835662604 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.3125 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115284722998 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383276087628 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429811184461 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077400333318 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046132995378 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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