Do you agree or disagree?
In order to succeed in doing a new job the ability to adapt onself to the new enviroment is more important than the excellent knowledge of this job.
In the modern era, finding, and commencing a job is of great importance, for leading a gratifying life is due to have a decent job. It is clearly understood that if a person does not succeed in his/her job they will lose motivation and also it would significantly affect their pocketbook. Opinion are devided as to whether knowledge is the eminent factor in a successful career or the skill of adaptation to a new atmosphere with new coleagues. Despite the fact that, being compatible with the enviroment create a convinient situation, it is my firm conviction that having substantial knowledge is more important in the career progression. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that knowlede is like a sword to fight job-related problems . Without any doubt, in the way of being successful in your job, a person will struggle with a host of issues, problems, and challenges, and without the adequte knowlege how can she/he resolve them. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; I am the research and development engineer of a implant producing company. Implants may fail in the mouth of patient due to several reasons and it is one of my responsibilties to find out the design or production problem and amend it. Without the academic information and knowlege I am not capable of doing well in such a project and will defenitly results in the failure in my job. As you can see the, knowlege is in close relationship with the success of a career.
Another worthwile reason to be mentioned is that, having the knowledge makes you confident in your career. When a person have the knowledge is able to share their opinions whenever it is required and prove themselves. Imagine a situation where you are in a meeting to analyse the progress of the company,and there are plenty of other people in the room such as your chief managor, your co-worker, and etc. According to the researches and statistics, those who have are more knowledgable are more willing to talk and share their opinion or even give some suggestions to improve the sytems. Clearly, the chief managor would be attracted to those people and may even propose a better job position to them and every one call it success.
To wrap up it is a foregone conclusion that having the knowledge and information is the key role in the success of a person's career. The fact that knowledge assist you solving challenges and problems which your career breeds, coupled with the fact that it boost your confidence, is the reasson which strenghtens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...t their pocketbook. Opinion are devided as to whether knowledge is the eminent factor in a su...
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Line 2, column 101, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ke a sword to fight job-related problems . Without any doubt, in the way of being ...
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Line 2, column 286, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'resolves'.
Suggestion: resolves
...out the adequte knowlege how can she/he resolve them. Take my personal experience as a ...
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Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...he research and development engineer of a implant producing company. Implants may...
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Line 2, column 751, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...n the failure in my job. As you can see the, knowlege is in close relationship with ...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...g to analyse the progress of the company,and there are plenty of other people in the...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... as your chief managor, your co-worker, and etc. According to the researches and statist...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...searches and statistics, those who have are more knowledgable are more willing to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, well, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81264108352 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85980345008 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519187358916 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4306705215 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.444444444 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184683862249 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537670543487 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424302579477 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107137376447 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061894260976 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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