Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, our family is an inseprable part of our life. As it is stated in all religions, family is of great importance and it is highly recommended to keep contact with them. Opinions are devided as to whether our grandparents, aunts, and uncles were more importan hitertho or they are now.. Despite the fact that unfortunatly some one not only does not care about their extended family, but also they do not pay so much attention to their own parents, it is my firm conviction that our extended members of family have a cardinal role in our life. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that it is an immoral and unpolite attitude to forget about your grandparents and other relatives. It is crystal clear that they care so much about us, for example they are always in our birthday parties, buying gifts and present for us, taking responsibily of us whenever our parents were busy with their works. Take my personal example as a complleing example, when I was accepted for the master program after a close competition I first called my parents to tell them about it and then I called my aunt, whithout any exageration she was even mush more happier that my parents. Why should we forget them while they are too kind to us?
Another worthwile reason to be mentioned is that it is an inevitable fact to have several networks and relationship for leading a gratifying life and be succeful. No one can cast doubt on the fact that lots of oppurtunities in our life were proposed to us through others, particularly family members. Besides, as they are expertise people in distinct areas, there are a lot to learn from. Take a cousin who is a great real state agent as an example. When you are looking for a job in this field or you are in search of a house to buy or rent you can ask for a help. He/ she would probably propose a fair price and will guide you for a better purchase.
To wrap up, it is a forgone conclusion that our extended relatives are yet important and precoius for us. The fact that for loving, protecting and supporting us it a rude habbit to consider them as less important members of family, coupled with the fact that miscellenious oppurtuinities will be available for us ensuing keeping contact with them is the reason strenghten my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...contact with them. Opinions are devided as to whether our grandparents, aunts, and uncles wer...
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Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...e more importan hitertho or they are now.. Despite the fact that unfortunatly some...
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Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...ow.. Despite the fact that unfortunatly some one not only does not care about their exte...
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Line 2, column 587, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'mushed'.
Suggestion: mushed
..., whithout any exageration she was even mush more happier that my parents. Why shoul...
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Line 2, column 592, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...thout any exageration she was even mush more happier that my parents. Why should we forget t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, so, then, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54523809524 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63881179026 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1533833347 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.294117647 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23529411765 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144799920103 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429269649897 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296007235118 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882498364987 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194632394771 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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