Do you agree or disagree?
People learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers-than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisor.
It is undeniable that learning is a crucial thing in humans life. It provides them with essential information they need to servive. In my opinion, people learn better from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors than from those at their own level, such as fellow students or co-workers.
First, teachers' knowledge about any topic is completed, so they can give full information about the subject. However, fellow students do not always understand things correctly, which could lead to wrong teaching. For instance, my brother Sami was sick for one week last simester. He missed many classes from biology course. When he tried to get a make over, he asked his friend to help him with it. Unfortunately, his friend did not understand classes well. He tought Sami the definition of acellular organisms, but he forgot to give him an example about it. At the test, one of the most important questions was to list different kinds of acellular organisms. My brother did not know that he was suppose to memories them, so he failed the test. After the test, he went to the professor to explain what he missed befor to be able to pass the final test.
Second, supervisors have an experience in their job, and they are the best choice to train new employees. They also have creative ways to simplify complex topics. For example, when my second brother Rami started his three months training at one of computer's companies, he faced many difficulties in understanding how their computer system works. In response, he asked his co-workers to help him, but they confused him more. He spent two weeks trying to figure it out. He had a friendly manager called Suzan. she offered her help. She gave him the guideline, she practiced everything in front of him, and she supervized him while he was doing his work. He understood all tasks in three days. Now, my brother is expecting to be assigned for a full-time position on this company.
To sum up, I think it is better to learn from those at a higher level than from those at the same level not only because they know better, but also they are more creative in illustrating information, and it will be more intresting to learn from them. Moreover, I suggest to make a weekly free hour for students to ask what ever they want.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...to servive. In my opinion, people learn better from those at a higher level, such as t...
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Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
...ms. My brother did not know that he was suppose to memories them, so he failed the test...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...He had a friendly manager called Suzan. she offered her help. She gave him the guid...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6975 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58683083135 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7102967201 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.16 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283627247616 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658757625619 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164145011895 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266419127459 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.243400436329 0.0645574589148 377% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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