At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial supports.
It is undeniable that the education in universities and colleges needs a lot of financial supports to make sure that it will be in the best way for all students. However, I think that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should also receive that support. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, the healthy mind is in the healthy body, so if any university wants high level of education, it has to give attension to students' activities such as exercising and socializing. For instance, when I was studying in the college, my scores was very bad in the first semester. At the begining of the second one I saw an advertisement for a basketball club in our campus. At that time, I was very upset because of my grades, and I was looking for a way to escape emotionally from it, so I went there, and registered at that club. I practiced basketball twice a week continously. My mood changed, and I became an optimistic person, which in turn affected my behaviors and feelings toward my study, and fortunately it had apositive effect on my scores. I graduated with high grades, and I got an offer for a scholarship to complete my education in one of the most important universities in the country.
Second, education is not only from books and classes. People can learn many things from other activities, and universities have to be inclusive, so they have to support social activities and sports in the same way they support classes and libraries. For example, from my basketball team, I learnt many good things that they benefit me in my job after graduation. I knew essentials for team working that are needed to complete any project in any company, and I learnt how to be patient and polite with customer from dealing with other players in the team. It was imposible for me to know all those things from attending classes or visiting the library.
To sum up, I strongely believe that social activities in coleeges and universities are as important as lessons and libraries not only because they can teach people many useful things, but also taking care of our body and mental health helps them in completing their education in the best way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, to begin with, to sum up, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68020304569 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75836367744 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.26173357 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238749591164 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806216945892 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137453391314 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167615576582 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122870883938 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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