Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a large city.” Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.
Most people in the world think that living in a large city is a good thing to raise kids since most cities these days are well developed and served. Personally, I believe that big cities might offer high quality of life, but certainly, countrysides are better for children to grow up in. I feel this way for several reasons, which I am going to explore in the following essay.
To begin with, living in a countryside means being closer to the nature, which in turn means clearer water and air. When kids at early ages grow up with pure oxygen, they will get stronger lungs and healthier bodies. My friend experience is a compelling of this. When we were kids, we lived in Amman, which was the capital of Jordan. Amman is the biggest city there. My friend shada used to have an early stage of Asthma. She suffered a lot from breath shortening and Asthma attacks. At the fifth grade, her parents decided to move out Amman to the countryside. Living there helped shada to improve her health and over come the disease. Last year, she came back to amman with healthy body. She was very happy when she said that she can not remember when the last attack was.
Second, countryside has less destractions either from the technology or from the modern life style that available in the larg city. Children at younge age need to be away from those destractions, so their brains will develope in a healthy manner. Furthermore, being in a larg city with all noises also affects the brain negatively. That is why If it was for my kids , I will raise them in the countryside. They will wake up early with birds' tweets rather than cars' horns, and they will spend there time feeding animals and running in the farm instead of sitting hours on their computers.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that growing up in a countryside is better for children than a large city. This is not only because it is better for their body health, but also it is healthier for their brain development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, well, as for, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55367231638 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3951514868 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573446327684 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3664892717 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7619047619 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247110903718 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067103454637 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770671870108 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172478840996 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776839297734 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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