Do you agree or disagree with the statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
The influence of celebrities in society is undeniable, as they are well-known, all aspects of their behavior or action are analyzed by the public. While some group believes that there the opinion of famous people is mostly cared for by the younger generation; another group, on the other hand, feels their idea and outlooks are generally cared by the elders. My standpoint is aligned with the first group. Among the countless reasons which give adherence to my perspective, I would discuss the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
The first striking reason which should be considered is the personality of the younger generation does not form on that age and they seek for the specific and ideal role model. According to the noteworthy, intelligent study conducted by the Psychology Department of Tehran University in Iran, the formation of characteristic and personality of mankind initiates from the age of 6 and continues until the age of thirty-five. In this case, the kids and the young generation are looking for the way of behaving for themselves. Furthermore, for the sake of impact factors of celebrities in society, they are the easiest and accessible form of imitation source for youths. Consequently, the eagerness of younger people for finding a role model makes them to mostly care about famous people's opinion.
Another equally crucial reason which should be highlighted here is the most followers of the celebrities are youths. Nowadays, according to the existence of different types of public media, the latest news of famous people is released so fast, in which everyone can get information about them in a very short period. Otherwise, it is the Yonge people who generally follow this news in comparison with the elder people. A lucid example for this reason which shed the spotlight on the issue is my parent's example. Both my parents and I spent the same hours _an hour a day_ for watching the television; meanwhile, my parents first choice is the news program; main, in the contrast, is the magazine program. Therefore, my parents have less access and information about celebrities' actions and in this scenario, how we could expect that celebrities' outlooks are important for elder people.
However, some people may discuss that the old generation also follows some celebrities from their youth. Since they were younger in the past and they also show the same reaction to famous people, as the current youth does. However, these people are overlooking a subtle point; although they can admire or follow some well-known people, this admiration is merely for their field of expertise. For instance, they follow news related to a specific athlete; because of his professional performance on that specific field of sport is influenced them. This way of persuading the news about the famous is the far different from the youth's fanatic follows.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons explicitly illustrate that famous people have a great impact on the young generation in comparison with the elder one. Because the formation of personality in the younger ages urge the youth to follow a role model, the celebrities are mostly persuading by young people. Besides, the old people who follow the celebrities for the sake of admiration of the field of professionality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2795.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16635859519 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91410301905 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47134935305 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.0 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.432892928 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.045454545 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5909090909 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146220876533 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506074762305 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459251156021 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926700998755 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189380936508 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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