Do you agree or disagree with the statement? People should try different jobs before deciding a career
Some people think that people should focus on one job before deciding a career, as specialization is one of important quality which people should cultivate. However, I firmly believe that people should try diverse jobs before deciding a career. This is because, having different jobs can provide people an opportunity for encountering diverse experiences. Moreover, people can cultivate a wide variety of knowledge by trying different jobs.
To begin with, trying varied jobs before deciding a field to focus make people to have a diverse experience. I believe that the experience is one of the most important source of pleasure in the world. Imagine people only have textbook knowledge. Their views will be so narrow. By having a wide variety of jobs, people can not only gain diverse experience but also broaden their horizons of the world. For exmaple, before I decide my career as software engineer, I tried a variety of jobs including photographer. Therefore, even though my current career is totally irrelevant to photo exhibition, I can relish the photo exhibition imagining the photographer's intent and how those photos are pictured. Had it not been for the experience of working as photographer, I would not been able to enjoy the pleasure of visiting photo exhibtion.
Furthermore, by having diverse jobs, people can cultivate a wide variety of knowledge. In my opinon, it is required for people to have a wide variety of knowledge rather than deep knowledge of one specific field as the society is too complicated nowadays. A person with a wide array of knowledge is regarded as 'a person of intelligence' and can solve a complex problem which requires a knowledge of two or more fields are needed to be solved. To give an anecdote, my colleague Lucy had worked for IT company before she had a job in advertisement company. One day, her team had to design an advertisement of a product from IT company. As, nobody except Lucy did not have any knowledge about IT product, only Lucy could propose a successful design and it leads her promotion. Likewise people may raise an insight by having different jobs which is essential for success in complicated society.
In conclusion, having different jobs can provide one an opportunity to encounter diverse experience which make world more enjoyable and an opportunity to cultivate a knowledge of diverse fields which is needed to solve intricate problem. Therefore I firmly hold that people should try distinct jobs before they decide a field to focus in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0551558753 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87581073216 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453237410072 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4053777674 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.380952381 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274354608841 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104951976206 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117117618201 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211623646865 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117988821582 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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