Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Whether competition for higher grades is an ideal method of learning is controversial topic. On the one hand, one might say as society is being more competitive than ever before, encouraging competition makes students be ready to enter society and competition can also encourage students a motive to study harder. However I agree with the statement in that competition can hinder student's critical thinking and curiosity. What is more, it can also deprive students an opportunity to enjoy the pleasure of learning.
To begin with, I think that competition can foster student's ability only in limited condition: when studying at relatively low level such as middle school or high school. In South Korea, for example, the competitive society make students to focus on only one goal: higher grade than others. Therefore students in South Korea know how to achieve superior grade than others and actually show great records in international math contest. What is more, Obama, former president of United States regarded Korea's math education as role model which United States should follow. However, we should recognize that there is no Korean Noble Prize winner in academic fields. As many students are likely to memorize algebra and the solutions rather than understanding the principles to get higher score on test during middle school or high school, their math skill is being inferior as going to higher institute such as graduate or colleges. Likewise severe competition can limit learner's ability when learners are studying at higher level.
What is more, sever competition can discourage students from thinking critically and having curiosity. Students who are among competition are likely to uncritically accept the purported facts without doubts and questions. However, curiosity and questioning are one of the most important aspects when studying. For example. let us consider a student who is studying physics. As we all know, curiosity and questioning are critical in physics. Newton discovered gravity by asking why apples fall down. Ada E. Yonath, a Noble Prize winner, states that curiosity is a great momentum to significant scientific finding. However, as the student wishes 'A' on test to win the competition, he/she is unlikely to question why the 'fact' happened and miss the opportunity to discover 'great' finding. Likewise, if society encourages competition for high grades, it can limit student's critical thinking and curiosity.
Finally, severe competition can deprive students an opportunity to enjoy the pleasure of learning which is a very essence of studying. Not a high grade and competition but pleasure can lead to 'true' learning. Music and art, for example, requires us having sufficient leisure time to enjoy its beauty and charm. As great artists had owned unique art technique and musical insight, students without their own musical insight and innovations are nearly impossible to be a successful artist. However, students who are besieged by harsh competition might cram and memorize the crafty art skill and mellifluous melody rather than enjoying its beauty. The students are unlikely to achieve such innovations and unique musical sight even though they might get 'A' on test.
In conclusion, even though I concede that competition can help students achieving great performance at lower level, I agree with the statement based on above mentioned reasons. Competition does not provide unqualified quality of education but it limits student's full potential.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2949.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39122486289 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78554937411 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500914076782 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 936.0 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.1270111251 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.321428571 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5357142857 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03571428571 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239036737185 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677750062877 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730131808582 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145397988752 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464482093066 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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