Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Whether encouraging competition for higher grades is ideal learning method is controversial. On the one hand, some people argues that competition is essential in these competitive society and actually provide motivations students to study harder and increase the quality of learning. However I agree with the statement in that competition can not only deprive opportunity for developing creative and critical thinking but also be too burdensome for students to enjoy the learning.
First of all, I admit that competitive environment can induce greater performance in limited conditions: when studying relatively low level of studies such as middle school or high school level math. In South Korea, society encourages students focusing only one goal: higher score than others. Therefore students in South Korea know how to achieve better performance in test and actually show superior records in international math contest. What is more, Obama, a former president in the United States, regarded South Korea's math education as role model what United States should follow. However, in reality, we should recognize the fact that there is no Korean Nobel Prize winner. As students in Korea are likely to memorize the solutions and algebras which can be helpful when studying math at middle school or high school, rather than understanding principles, these students show inferior results as they attends to higher institution such as graduate school or colleges. Likewise, inducing competition can limit student's ability to study at higher level.
What is more, competition can limit student's critical thinking. If people study only for higher scores, they are likely to uncritically accept purported facts without questioning because they may regard questioning as useless to achieve higher grades. For example, let us consider students who study physics. As we all know, curiosity and questioning is one of the most important aspect when studying physics. Newton discovers gravity by questioning why apples fall down. Ada E. Yonath, Nobel Prize winner, states that curiosity is momentum of great scientific finding. However if students focuses only on higher grade, they might cram and memorizes results or facts without thinking what causes these results. Therefore severe competition can deprive students an opportunity to think creative and discover a 'great' finding.
Finally, people who are among competition might miss pleasure which is a very essence of study. Not a competition or high scores but a pleasure of learning can lead to 'true' learning. Arts and music, for example, require sufficient leisure times to enjoy the beauty of them fully. However, when environment of such severe competition is besieging learners, they might rather choose to memory crafty technique or great melody without recognizing its own beauty and charm. As great artists had their own creative technique and melody, own musical intuition and innovation are required to be successful artists. However it is unlikely that people who studies only for higher grade can achieve such innovations and acquire own musical sight.
In conclusion, even though I concede that competition can foster greater performance at relatively low level of study, I agree with the statement based on above mentioned reasons. Competitions do not induce unqualified quality of learning, rather it limits the full potential of learners.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2883.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50190839695 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7734326468 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509541984733 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 905.4 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5030922002 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.884615385 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251855820642 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687165951048 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683040761797 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148303992535 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441308640921 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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