"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author proposes requiring all of Acme employees to take Easy Read course since the course has greatly improved productivity and cheap regarding its effectiveness. He or she offers an interesting argument, but it suffers from some logical flaws and gaps in evidence. While connections suggested are reasonable, there are many other possible scenarios that discourage Acme mandating all of its workers to take the course.
To begin with, the author assumes that the course is usefulness because one graduate is able to read a report fast, and the another graduate rises to vice president of the company. Yet there is no reason to believe that these cases represents all graduates. Only two samples are too few to corroborate the author's assumptions. They may be exceptional graduate, or they have already great potential of performing great performance regardless of attending the course. In fact, other graduate may have no effect of Easy Read Speed-Reading course. Therefore the author should provide more examples of excellent graduates to us to corroborate his or her assumption.
Secondly, the author assumes that the more information is accompanied by faster reading. However the author offers no data about how many information can be acquired by attendee of the course. Reading fast does not always lead to more information. The course may teach techniques such as skimming only main part and neglecting florid details which improve the quality of reading because the course is regarding only the speed of reading, and not considering the quality of reading. Therefore without accessing to curriculum or teaching method of the course, it is too hasty to claim that Easy Read Speed-Reading course will lead the graduates to more information just because the course makes the attendees read faster than before.
Even though we assume though that above assumptions will all hold up, the author's proposal requiring all of employees to take the Easy Read course to benefit Acme is still illogical. There are usually many types of works in company: evaluating profit of year, calculating cost to make product, developing technique of product, etc. While there are some types of working which fast reading can be benefit, fast reading can not be effective to all workers. For example, employee whose major task is calculating may not be greatly improved by fast reading. The author should provide more logical reasons to why the course can be useful to all workers regardless of their major jobs in the company.
Finally, the author presents cheap cost as evidence to benefit of the course. However calculating only lecture fee when considering the cost could be misleading. Since we do not have how many workers are employed by the company. If the company has 10 workers than corresponding total lecture fee will be $5000, else if the company employs 10,000 workers the total lecture fee will be 5 million dollars. What is more, we should consider the loss during absence of workers. Because the course includes three-week seminar in Spruce City the workers can not work during three-weeks. It may be great loss if the absence employees are tasking major works. Therefore it is illogical to assume that the course is cost-effective just because the lecture fee is cheap.
To sum, the author's assumption that demanding the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course to all of its employees will benefit Acme is logically flawed based on the above mentioned reasons. To strengthen his or her argument, the author should closely examine all the conditions and possible factors. In conclusion, the author's argument reflects unsupported claims without clear reasons or evidence.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 594 350
No. of Characters: 3019 1500
No. of Different Words: 258 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.937 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 236 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 183 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 76 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.483 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.427 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.724 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...fect of Easy Read Speed-Reading course. Therefore the author should provide more examples...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ation is accompanied by faster reading. However the author offers no data about how man...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ver the author offers no data about how many information can be acquired by attendee...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...ver the author offers no data about how many information can be acquired by attendee of the cour...
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Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...not considering the quality of reading. Therefore without accessing to curriculum or teac...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...above assumptions will all hold up, the authors proposal requiring all of employees to ...
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Line 9, column 163, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsidering the cost could be misleading. Since we do not have how many workers are emp...
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Line 9, column 471, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...der the loss during absence of workers. Because the course includes three-week seminar ...
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Line 9, column 649, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ence employees are tasking major works. Therefore it is illogical to assume that the cour...
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Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...he lecture fee is cheap. To sum, the authors assumption that demanding the Easy Read...
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Line 11, column 311, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nd possible factors. In conclusion, the authors argument reflects unsupported claims wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3085.0 2260.96107784 136% => OK
No of words: 594.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1936026936 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75662849671 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447811447811 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 963.9 705.55239521 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3318580861 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.833333333 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63333333333 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337502444091 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085854779275 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932459609943 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18835121776 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784625210395 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 98.500998004 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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