Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
Subjects such as art, music, and drama should be a part of every child’s basic education.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt that, art and music play a key role in society’s history. From my point of view, children should be informed about their society and their culture. This will not be possible unless they would be taught about drama, art or music of their country. I, personally, agree with the statement. My reasons will be explained in following.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea, lies in the fact that art, drama and music are as important as other fields such as math, chemistry or physics. To elucidate this, recently a group of researchers in university of Tehran in Iran have conducted research about society behavior evolution. In this research people who have the knowledge of art, music or history are able to tackle the problems in their own lives better than scientist such as physicians or chemists.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that art music and drama can increase children’s creativity and imaginary. My personal experience can be a vivid example to this assertion. When I was child I did not take part in childish dramatic story telling groups or engaging in music classes. On the other hand, my younger sister was keen on music and reading story. Now that both are adults, she can make relationship with stories and has read many books which boost her creativity and flourish her art talent.
To make the long story short, based on aforementioned reasons, we can draw a conclusion that art, music and drama should be children’s part of education.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1297.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 267.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85767790262 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64651201897 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602996254682 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2829492224 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6428571429 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257628978274 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944250597816 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637998511596 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163185783024 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431179840883 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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