do you agree or disagree with this statement? successful people try new things and take risks in their life rather than doing only what they know how to do well. use reasons and examples to support your answer.
Different people in their lives try to do everything to achieve to success and ideal place they imagined for themselves. Generally, some humans try to avoid risky actions and stick to the abilities they have and they know how to do them. While, there are some other people who like to test various incidents and have fresh experinces in different locations. I think that a person should let itself open to try new experinces due to some reasons which i am going to explain them accordingly below.
First, we should know that trying new things in our short life is the only way to understand our limitations and work hard to overcome those effectively. experincing new events and places shows us new oppertunities for us which can lead to a positive change in our future. For example, my friend Jim always nagged about his poor economical and financial condition, since he grew up in a large family with many brothers and sisters. However, he never intended to do anything about his situation. He just continued his work as a carpenter in a local shop in our town where he knew the area and the work so well. But, its income salary was not satisfactory and he can not even rent a bigger house for himself. Suddenly, one day he decided to travel to Boston to see if he can find a better job for himself. Surprisingly, he got familiarized with a musical band who need a lead vocalist for their group after their singers departure. Jim just test his voice there for fun in the band. on the other hand the band owner loved the especial vibe in his vocie and hired him with a ten figure contract. So, as you see our life can change with any little decision we make.
Secondly, successful people are mostly capable of handling multi task situations normally. They can carry out different activities and manage them in the same time. Thus, if we just know one work to do, we are not preparing ourselves for future. Because, we may lose our chance to develop in our career due to our low ability in certain new areas in our expertise. As the world enhance people should keep themselves up to date and learn new features of their job to thrive during the time and be prepared to cease any oppertunity ahead.
in conclusion, deciding whether or not to try new things is a big moment of our life. it can totally effect our future. So we should decide about it carefully.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55971896956 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51022185075 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566744730679 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0444485106 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.652173913 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5652173913 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192186737265 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560994033778 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577984162059 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122542490432 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535515442019 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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