Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
Working hours and its lenght is an important matter that involves most of the people in anywhere. Generally, people used to work five days in a week for a determined period of time each day. However, some others like to work only three days a week for longer hours to have longer off days which they can rest. In my view, I disagree with the idea of having longer hours for shorter working days, since I think it would not be beneficial for two distinctive reasons.
First, working for longer hours can effect the workers and employees in a negative way. They mostly get tired during longer hours of work and this consequently transfers into their free times and holidays, as they still feel tired due to compressive amount of works in their short working days. They may also face sleep deprevation issues which can seriously harm them, because they occasionally would not have had enough time after their work to rest and recover for next working days. For example, my friend Jim worked in a bank where bank managers decided to execute the three days working policy. He had to work until late in the afternoon without any relaxing time. He just had the possibility to eat his dinner and sleep for a while. Surprisingly, after some time, he made a huge mistake and transfer a lot of money to a wrong numbered account, although, he had a good experience in his job and never did a mistake before.
Second, this kind of plan can make our planning and schedualing difficult in many conditions, since the general portion of companies and working places follow the usual five-day working style. So, if you work in a place where they implement three days working system, you can not use your first two free days efficiently. This is because of the fact that your kids should attend school for five days and you can only see them in weekends like the old days. Your friends and relatives also can not benefit from this system as most of them have to work five days. For instance, I hate to wait for my sons to return from school when I sit alone at home in these days.
In conclusion, working hours policies are getting so crucial these days. a lot of people decide to shift their work to shorter working days style while some others prefer to maintain their current position. There are rationally some resasons for this stay which can include resting and recovering problems and inability to use these free days effectively. So, unless all working system shifts to this new proposed type, it is not logical to change anything.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rk five days in a week for a determined period of time each day. However, some others like to ...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rs can effect the workers and employees in a negative way. They mostly get tired during longer ho...
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Line 9, column 331, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...irst two free days efficiently. This is because of the fact that your kids should attend school for five...
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Line 13, column 74, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
...cies are getting so crucial these days. a lot of people decide to shift their wor...
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Line 13, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., it is not logical to change anything.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66071428571 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34496567112 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524553571429 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9570017995 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363152469293 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122005900956 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806147580397 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238937953095 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819663270105 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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