Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">it goes without saying that all parents have a lot of concerns for their children to have a prosperous life in future. however, recently there has been an active controversy among many people over the very notion that whether in which time children were more dependent to their parents for making decision about their own life, in the past or today. although it is hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I personally adhere to the fact that in the past fathers and mothers played a crucial role in children's decision making. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">To start with, it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that over several centuries the family was of the paramount importance in societies. In other words, the foremost base in every community was the family. it was due to the fact that in the last centuries there were not a strong government to support the individuals from the beginning of life until the end in multifarious variety of sectors, such as education, health care, job finding and so forth. Hence, a family had the function of a government in small scale. As a result a children should obey all the commands that they get from parents. Because, it was their parents who provide them with all the necessities of life. An example can drive this notion home. my grandfather lived in a big family which comprised four sisters and five brothers. he had the dream to become an engineer, their parents however needed a labor force for their farm as they gained the revenue from agriculture. my grandfather had to leave away his hopes and desires in order to give a hand to his family. In my opinion the only reason he imposed to become a simple farmer instead of a great engineer, lies behind the fact that he was dependent to his parents. Had my grandfather lived in a country which had a powerful government that supported the youngster for education and allocate some budget for them, he would have continued his educations and would have become a startling engineer in a top-notch company.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">On the other hand, in today’s modern world where we live, not only are children supported by the special policies of the governments to continue their education in their field of interest, but also they will have access to all the opportunities to find a rewarding job and follow their dreams. having not any dependency to their family, juvenile are not under the pressure to obey their parents orders and wishes. Moreover, nowadays, children possess more independency due to they soon access to all sorts of media which make them acquainted with the other children’s life condition all around the word. Watching other children have some freedom they do not, they become eager to achieve all these sorts of liberties. they do all their efforts to make their personal decision deliberately, without any interference by their parents. As a case in point, as an in-depth study conducted in some developing countries demonstrates, a hefty majority of adolescents have a complete freedom in choosing in myriad aspects of life, such as choosing their major in university and collages, choosing their intimate friends and their beloved career, to name but a handful.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">Drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, although what I mentioned above might not be generalizable to the whole context; there are always some exceptions excluded from the general rule, I do believe that children in today’s world have more freedom in decision making comparing to children in past centuries. Not only do people in the past have to obey their parents due to their economic dependency, but also youngsters, today have more independency and more information about their right for make personal decisions by their own.
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...tion about their right for make personal decisions by their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3688.0 1977.66487455 186% => OK
No of words: 641.0 407.700716846 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75351014041 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0316973083 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.9929399997 2.67179642975 262% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 308.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480499219969 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1143.9 618.680645161 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.278594318 48.9658058833 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.666666667 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7083333333 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.5376344086 415% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203724954205 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762917259915 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975789153207 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163482999442 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548479009839 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.37 10.9000537634 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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