If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
In today's modern world, having a good job is of great importance. because not only a good job does bring us happiness, but also it could attach our life to the most sophisticated society levels. I personally adhere to the view that it is better to wait for a satisfying job rather than get immediately a secure but a low level job. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To start with, being interested in our career is of great importance. To be successful in upcoming years of our life, we should follow our dreams and our ultimate goals. because growing up, we become exhausted of what we do without any interest. although a secure job could bring us an array of merits, in long-term will become frustrating for us to continue some career which we are not interested in. To put this in more vivid picture, let us consider a situation in which a young man find a decent job in a bank. he is aware of his mental position and his capacity for long and mundane works. In fact, he is not able to handle a laborious task of sitting behind a desk. However, he consider that this is a well-paid job. Hence he accept it. Nevertheless after only a few years he will resign from his job, searching for a new and more exciting career, perhaps in an atelier of photography. this kind of job is his actual interest, what he really expected from his childhood. In art works he is more talented. this is, therefore, crystal clear that he should has been waited, from the first, for this artistic work.
From another point of view, the more we have patience the more we get better chance to find more rewarding jobs. In today's competitive world, it is crucial to become sophisticated in a field of work by continuing our education in higher levels in good universities. although it is possible that we find a secure job after graduation from high school, it is more sensible that in youth we continue our education to top levels to find a superior job. Due to the fact that the top-notch companies have a very competitive admission, graduated students in PhD or masters, from top ranked universities have more chance to get a job in these companies. As an in-depth study conducted in some developed countries indicated, The hefty of the people who earn a promising job in great companies in these countries are the graduated students from top 50 universities in the world. Thereby, as far as I am concerned, it is more reasonable to develop our knowledge and wait for a better job because a decent and satisfying job has a profound influence over our entire life.
Drawn upon the aforementioned reason, people should wait for a promising job because an only secure job is not enough for the whole life. Not only waiting for a satisfying job could make us happier in our future life, but also by continuing our study we can get to higher level vacancies in top-notch companies. which can make us wealthy at the end.
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...level vacancies in top-notch companies. which can make us wealthy at the end.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, well, in fact, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60687022901 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7008071577 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459923664122 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1079897632 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8461538462 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31813033044 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091826547262 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089192754709 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233261761812 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590892140874 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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