For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
In today's' competitive life, we all need to have a good job and succeed in our careers. However, there is an active controversy over whether being hardworking is more important or doing good networking and communicate well with people. I personally, tend to adhere to the view that having the ability to interact with other people play a crucial role in our prosperity in our future job. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To begin with, almost all the companies and institutions have an interview for their applicants. In order to succeed in this first step, we should be able to present our abilities and merits appropriately. If we are incapable to introduce ourself to the superiors, then they would not accept us. That is because they initially need employees who are professional in interacting with other people, especially in companies that have lots of clients. Consider my own experience as an example. One of my high school classmates and I were simultaneously informed about a job vacancy in the greatest literature journals of our city. We both were the top students who were always considered as the most hardworking ones. We went to that journal office for the interview. I explain everything about my experiences and competences of writing and editing. However, he just told them that he had good grades in school. I knew that both are in the same level of proficiency, nevertheless, the committee assumed that he has nothing to offer to the office. Due to this fact, they accept me for that job position. This example clearly demonstrates how could networking and communication ability lead us to great work opportunities.
On the other hand, it is necessary to be able to interact with others in order to respond to the clients' needs. When we are in a company with a great number of co-workers and clients, we have no choice but entering in contact with them to fulfill all the questions and inquiries. Imagine a situation in which some employee is responsible for query sector. If this person knows everything about his work except has enough attention and responsibility to answer the question, his information and subtle knowledge are to no use. Therefore, he will be considered as an useless employee and there will be the possibility that the company decides to deport him. on the other hand, if we show our capability of networking and our charismatic character in front of our boss, they may decide to promote us.
Drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, the merits of being a person with the ability to relate with people sugar-coat the advantageous of being hardworking in school. Not only could the communication ability lead us to succeed in interviews for important job vacancies, but also it could help us to look like a better and worthier employee for the company as well as increase our chance to get promotion in our job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion: On
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90797546012 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93558549318 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505112474438 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5057891209 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.56 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166438634879 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432123133217 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050273298877 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127573496985 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084378665795 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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