Do you agree or disagree that students should be required to study art and science during secondary school? Explain your answer with reasons and examples
This subject is usually wrangled about among individuals. It isn't easy to concur or oppose this idea with any articulation without considering the persuasive reasons for this choice. Some people may claim that it should be mandatory for the students to study art and music; others argue that it shouldn't not be compulsory for the students to have these subjects during secondary school. Personally, I think students can benefit themselves, if they study art and music during secondary school. I will mention two main reasons for my perspective in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, art and music academic education enables us to broaden our carrier. Nowadays, most of the people wants to become doctor, scientists and engineer. All these fields required to have major either in science or math. There is no doubt in that because of competition and saturation students have to face a lot of predicaments for pursuing carrier in fields related to science and math. In contrast, If the student would study art and music during school, this will help the students to get job in variety of fields and they would not have to worry much after the completion of their education. My own experience is will demonstrates my point of view. During my secondary school, although my major was pharmacology, however, when I finished my education I had a hard time finding job related to my field. Luckily, I had studied music during my secondary school, I found a job in a known music band. Had I not studied music during school, I wouldn't have found that job. Therefore, it is proved from the above explanation that studying music during secondary school assist us to broaden our carrier.
Secondly, music and art knowledge helps us to appreciate nature. To be more specific, without the art and music we would not come to know about the God creativity. For instance, movies and documentaries are the true picture of blend of both art and music and gives us the opportunity to enjoy the nature. As, in any movies we can see the wonderful backgrounds, because of artistic creativity and we can hear a sole relaxing songs ,because of creativity of music which provide the sense to appreciate nature.
My own experience is a compelling example of this. Few days ago, I had watched a romantic movie casted in beautiful area of kashmir. The songs and the background view of the film exhibited the greater view of landscape of kashmir. If I had not watched that movie, I would not have come to know the importance of music and art in our life. Hence, it is pivotal to study art and music during the course of our study.
In summation, from the above mention discussion it is crystal and clear and art and science play a major role in our life and students should be required to study these subjects during school. This is because studying these subjects not only open the door for getting jobs in different fields, it also provides us an opportunity to learn about creativity through God
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in contrast, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82490272374 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67475130412 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451361867704 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5539870559 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3846153846 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42307692308 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257536302138 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769654329066 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780030603 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150645926331 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768801868692 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.