Do you agree or disagree with the topic that the government should spend more money in the support of arts than in athletics of state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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Do you agree or disagree with the topic that the government should spend more money in the support of arts than in athletics of state-sponsored Olympic teams.

I personally agree with the topic that the government should spend more money in the support of arts than in athletics of state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Firstly, look at the influence of arts. Everywhere in the country, the feature of arts integrity, characteristics spreads a lot. Arts represents a nation's identity.Education,norms,behavior,language,history are based on art.But athletics of state-sponsored Olympic teams are not so much influential. It contributes a little on the economy.
secondly,an artist upholds the features of a country not only in the country but also in the world. A young child learn the teaching of his own nationality,identity through arts. Whenever he is taught art, different historical persons contribution via arts,they feel to ponder over thyself and own nation. So it is the way of discovering his instinct space.But on the other hand athletics only make his country familiar to others.

Thirdly,look at the system of the athletics.There is a lot of expenditure for training players,media-coverage,coaching players etc. After that a team of eligible for playing will go to the Olympic championship.As a result its input is greater than output. After so much input, the country gets economical value from media partners,spectators etc. But there is a chance of loss for this huge project. Moreover its infrastructure is to be setup with great hardship.On the contrary,arts infrastructure are no so much huge.Besides art competition and expenditure for arts help a lot to discover own nation.

Fourthly, Look arts contain our subconscious mind. But athletics only a temporary merriment. Arts existence carries our nationalism, our ethics, belief, culture more easily. So learner of any one gets the pure knowledge from this. But athletics just only shows some gorgeousness or something else. This cannot be the idealistic view of a country.
Fifthly, look the greatest and developed countries. The more cautious about arts a country, the more sense of developed a country. Look at USA, CANADA. they get the immense force to change themselves from arts. As arts raise ourselves a sense of consciousness to develop ourselves.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47321428571 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.35462842977 2.67179642975 163% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577380952381 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5380915622 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.56 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.44 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.5376344086 470% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263672804851 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643897781318 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157335749357 0.0737576698707 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200562662086 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.272941618735 0.0645574589148 423% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.85 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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