Do you agree or disagree?
Because the modern life is more complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.(second edition)
Our world is exactly analogous to a web of complicated connections, however, owing to complexity which modern life bring for us, the ability to plan and organize is gaining importance. In this regret, I have to admit that I completely agree with this statement. There are several points in support of my view. Firstly, companies searching for young people who have ability of management and organization. Secondly, by this abilities young people also could manage their personal life. I will elaborate my opinion in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, nowadays companies searching for young people who are not only professional on their field, but also companies are searching for people with ability of management. The example of my brother could clarify my view. He is a talented boy with computer programming skills, however, he could not plan for his projects and waste a great deal of time every day. To make a long story short, after some days working in company, his boss fired him from the job. As this example demonstrate, the ability of organizing could pave the path for job opportunity, without the ability of planning, our knowledge seems to be useless.
From another aspect organizing and planning also play a vital role in people personal life. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view. Several years ago, I had to work all days and I could not spend most of the time with my family. My wife became angry to me and wanted to divorce, because I could not organize my time and I had no plan for my future. Finally, I learned management and devised a plan for our future. The example above could reveal the importance of planning in our personal life.
Taken all aspect mentioned above into consideration I pretty convinced that the ability to plan and organize are highly important especially for young people due to the fact that this ability pave the path for better job opportunity, furthermore, these ability helps people to manage their personal life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 419, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nagement and organization. Secondly, by this abilities young people also could manag...
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Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this ability' or 'these abilities'?
Suggestion: this ability; these abilities
...or better job opportunity, furthermore, these ability helps people to manage their personal l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89295774648 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66856475463 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495774647887 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9561964295 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243649782837 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081933667846 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724248623058 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172483957945 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524674822004 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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