Do you agree or disagree?
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Even though many psychologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that if parents give some money to children for their high grades, they won’t try to earn more money in future and this is a bad habit for children in low age, I firmly recommend that children in school-age need more encourage and admire for more successes and also take some experiences related to save money. And believe it or not, parents should always support their children of in school-age by money. I will elaborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that when adult people inspire and encourage the young persons, they will stimulate and prompt to study more and more. Actually in this age, children are sensitive and they need more regards and attentions of course for their efforts and attempt of obtain high marks. As an example, when I was a child I use to try perfect grades in my lessons, because of my parents use to give me some money or gifts. Suggest money to children not only is a perfect way that attribute to hard study, but also is the best method to supporting with money.
Another my remarkable reason is that youth people should learn and realize how earn money and how save it. As a matter of fact, parents teach their children and also help them to save money for their future. As children are growing up, they take great experiments that if they want to earn much money, they have to work and toil for that. For instance, I have saved some money in a bank since I was 10 years old, and now I am working in an office and I have learned who manage and organize my money easily.
As a result, parents have a prominent role in their children life as a supporter and sponsor that they can give some money or every things that are wealthy to them because of this technique makes young children to be happier for their high grade. And also they try to learn who attain much money with their attempts and take important skills by saving enough money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, for instance, of course, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47872340426 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30824098827 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473404255319 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.0411211657 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.538461538 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9230769231 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361472953609 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144784602845 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974200502381 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251735187165 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752593544972 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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