Do you agree or not?Because people are busy doing so many things, they do very few things well.

Generally speaking, I hold the contradictory view to the statement that individuals do very few things well because they are busy doing so many various things.
First, doing diverse kinds of things can develop positive attitudes much easier than just doing one thing all along. I can recall when I prepared for my college entrance examination, all I had to do was just to study hard and try to get a higher point. I felt a little bit depressed at that time, since the review for the examination was tedious and onerous. For a period, the harder I tried, the lower points I got. Once I blew a test again, I found myself with tears coming on and with them came desperation and hopelessness. I was absolutely broken emotionally without exaggeration. My father forced me to stop studying that night and pick up brushes and color palette again to doodle. By doodling, I slowed my pace, took a breath and relaxed myself. From then on, I always found some time to doodle which cultivated a positive attitude. Undoubtedly, this kind of stable and optimistic feelings can influence my academic achievements in a considerable ways. Therefore, the result caused by dwelling too much on one task may be no better than doing assorted things in a meantime.

Second, doing assorted things at the same time may gain more efficiency, as different missions can have mutual promotion to each other. One of the most eminent Renaissance polymath, Leonardo Da Vinci, whose area of interest included sculpting, painting, architecture and so on, was regarded as one of the mostly diversely talented individuals ever to have lived.
To be more specific, his anatomy knowledge was a great help to get the proportion of human body accurately, thus representing the character more realistically in sculpture.

Third, although individual's attention may objectively be scattered when dealing with several stuff, doing different things at the same time actually can help people improve their efficiency, because they are used to make their timetable flexible and practical. A survey conducted by experts from Oxford University shows that over 90% of the enterprisers can make good schedule and handle different things effectively and efficiently. These kinds of ability are cultivated by their dealing with their routing jobs always involving all kinds of various things.

By considering the several benefits stated above, individuals who are busy doing many a different thing, can finish their work as well as those who focus on one single stuff. In some degree, they can do even better.

Votes
Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...and try to get a higher point. I felt a little bit deprssion at that time, because everyth...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ention and keep me optimisitic agian. Second, doing different things can broad...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...ly a sculptor, painter and sculptor. He make his reputation due to his achievement i...
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Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... to his achievement in different areas. Whats more, his experience in painting really...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun stuff seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some stuff'.
Suggestion: some stuff
...ectively be scattered when dealing with several stuff, doing different things at the same tim...
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Line 7, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... doing different things at the same time actually can help people improve their e...
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Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to making'.
Suggestion: used to making
...rove their efficiency, because they are used to make their timetable flexible and practical....
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...involving all kinds of various things. By considering the several benefits stat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, may, really, second, so, third, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08108108108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67496274665 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.808337227 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5294117647 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336854812496 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105535288338 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151934910559 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246725093614 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.187501321771 0.0645574589148 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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