Do you agreeor disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements makes products seem much better that they really are
In this progressive and sophisticated world, the producing marchanties and staples is a critical factors that has a special role in modern humans life. Among this, advertising is one of the best way to introduce these products to mankinds. When it comes to this point, people have some debates as to whether arvertises make produces better than they really or not. Personally, I agree with the first group and in what follows, two reasons will be discused to shed light on this idea.
The first reason coming to my mind to substantiate my stand point is that advertising is the important way for companies to sale their products; therefore, it is the important task of advertises to incorage peoples to buy. In addition this issue is not just in this period of time and it comes from the ancient time when people had not any currency and they bought and sold just with staples. For example, If i have a production i will persuade people to buy my product. Therefore its the natural that advertises overstates about products. Producers pay a lot of money for these advertises and they should achieve their goals.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my statce is that advertises just speak about perfect charachteristics of products and they dont demonestrate disadvantages and defects of products. The producers who order advertises, know that if they show the defects of productions the custumers will not buy their products so they should tell some big lies to costumers. For instance, my employee has a fish and shrimp export company and when he order advertises just show some perfect advantages; otherwise i know about alot of disadvantages like antibiotcs residuals and some sulfur problems and about histamin that can lead to sudden death in some peoples.
To sum up, based on all arguementations stated above, it is natural that advertises overstate about products because if they tell the truth people ingnor them and because they produce in order to help producers to sell their products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0447761194 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84682233655 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540298507463 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.612543901 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168652706112 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682455542632 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374402211697 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107704068249 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108561649237 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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