Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, education is one of the critical issues which should be noticed in order to improve the quality of children's life in the future. When it comes to this point people have some debate as to whether parent are more involve in their kid's education these days or in the past. Personally, though, I agree with the first group and in what follows, three reasons will be discussed to shed light on this idea.
The first reason coming to my mind to substantiate my standpoint is that today education is crucially important than past. In the past, people always lived in the rural eraes and more number people worked as a farmer also with their skills. In contrast, thanks to modernisation children can select a lot of careers as a major. Therefore, people ought to possess a satisfying degree in order to achive a good job in the future. My grandfather experience demonstrates evidence of this. when he was 18, he found a good job at that time withouth worthwhile degree. In contrast, when I wanted to attend to university, my parents were woried about continuing my education because they knew that I could not find a proper job if had not rewarding degree.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my stance is that modern human have more paid time off from their job. Likewise, parents have shorter working days, so they have enough time to surveillance on children's education. For instance, my parent have a lot of free time in a day that they spend it on my academic problems. They pay university tuition fees, so they have right to check my grades to encourage me being a successful person.
to sum up based on all argumentation stated above, I strongly believe that modern parents are more involve in their children's education because they have more leisure time than people in the past and in modern lifestyle degrees are more valuable than professions and skills. Therefore, educational issues stimulate more stress not only on parents but also on children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9011627907 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71206441698 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55523255814 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0385788667 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.375 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236219358725 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776923060116 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688744158354 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159904272854 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703343850421 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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