Some people argue that being an employer is a better option; they cite the fact that working for others is easy and risk-free. However, in my opinion, I believe that it is better to own a business because of two main reasons which I will explore in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, owning a business provides us freedom. In other words, we do not have to follow a set of rules like when we are employees in a company or any other work. For instance, a business owner of a car manufacturing company has the flexibility to modify the designs as he/she likes; but can an employee have such power? Of course not. The employer has to follow the instruction of the manager, and he/she is always under the shadow of the owner. Thus, to be free of others’ influence and live life in our way, owning a business is the preferable one.
Secondly, business helps us to earn significant money and live a luxurious life. If anybody wants to make a huge amount, then it’s better to do business rather than be an employer. The salary obtained from being an employee is too low and barely helps to fulfill basic needs; thus, maintaining the quality life is far from their grasp. On the contrary, a business helps to make a huge sum of money that not only help to sustain life but also, spend money that is required to maintain a high standard-life. Bill Gates, one of the most successful business people, is the perfect example of this scenario. So, to spend a quality life where there is no scarcity of money, owning a business is the obvious choice.
Although there are some risks associated with the business, with better planning and forethought, those uncertainties can be easily avoided. Therefore, I am strongly consonant with the idea that owning a business is better than working under an employer.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, of course, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65830721003 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63452349126 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554858934169 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5141512142 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.875 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354352369173 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104769610562 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715615904407 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195813915176 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591671758013 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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