Television shows, movies, and latest online videos games has become important part of young teens. Personally, I believe that television programs, movies, and video games have huge influence in young generation's behaviors. I feel this way for two reasons which, I will explore on the following essay.
First of all, television programs, movies, and video games show various kind violence, fights and murders, and also presents consuming of drugs and alcohols. Due to such activities shown in movies, many young teen develop the euthanasia to taste and try such things. They started to get involve in different kind of gang fights with their friends and families. For example, my younger brother was very fond of movies and series, so that he used to spend a lot of time spending watching adult movies of violence and crimes. As a result, at the age of sixteen, he was so excited to taste some of the drugs, then he started taking that drugs and was so addicted to it which even caused him to involve in gang fight. This has brought a lot of trouble in our family. He was in the hospital for many days.
Secondly, these things make young teens get very addictive and do not spend their time with families. They spend most of time enjoying video games or partying with their friends. They spend a lot of money and even behave very rude to their parents and teachers. This things hampers their family relations,friendship, and even studies. My personal experience is very experience is very compelling example of this. About two years ago, when I completed my high school, i got very long vacation where I spend most of my time either playing video games or watching new movies and series. I was so addicted to this where i spend my all day hours playing video games and all my night hours watching movies without eating food or even talking to my friends and families. As a result, this hampers my preparation for aboard studies and i was very badly scold by my parents. I was mentally stress which leads very unpleasant action towards my parents.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that young teens are very spend time watching television programs, movies, and playing video games which highly influence their behavior. This is because such things shows different kind of violence and bad works and because they cause different addictions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82878411911 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53742195566 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.817390598 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198610854495 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719540223927 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117759398908 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178910780023 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116155273286 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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