Keeping good relationship with our coworkers plays a key role in our business. To achieve the maintenance of good relationship, we should be serious about our work, and we should ask them to be so as well. Therefore, I would choose a serious attitude regarding their work obligations to be the most influential and crucial trait. I will delve further into this matter in the following paragraphs, supporting my viewpoint from two perspectives: their existence as business partners, and their strong influence over our working attitude.
First of all, our coworkers and us are together only in our business hours. It is necessarily the case that we hang around or attend a party together in our private time. Therefore, what matters is to be serious during the working hours. For example, when I worked at a former company, my coworker was an interesting person, always making witty remarks. However, few of us highly evaluated his business skills. He was not punctual and was always late for important appointments. Owing to his behavior, he was dismissed within a year. Drawing from this experience, I am convinced that those who make us laugh does not mean that they are good coworkers.
Another reason is that if our coworkers have tendency to work hard, they will affect people around them in a positive way. Take a case from my friend's case. He is working at a trading company and receives a high reputation from people at his workplace. It is amazing, because he did not take his job seriously at first. What changed him was his coworker, who was so industrious and arduous that he got every job opportunity. He then thought he must change his attitude toward the job and learned to be serious about the job. We can conclude from his case that our coworkers have the influential power over us and could motivate us.
Admittedly, those who are willing to learn new knowledge are to be valued. Personally, I am a doctor whose work requires updating our knowledge constantly. For example, treatments to cancer have mesmerizingly developed in this twenty years. The evidence is mounting year by year. That is why, in many cases, what was acknowledged as a common therapy twenty years ago is not the best treatment now. However, refreshing our knowledge is not only required for our coworkers, but for all employees in every occupation. Therefore, I do not think this is the most important characteristic of a coworker.
From these reasons above, I definitely agree to the idea that those with a serious attitude toward their work obligations are to be evaluated most highly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, for example, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91095890411 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83410959309 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522831050228 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7015905322 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6666666667 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81481481481 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286372078349 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727042333797 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646014588392 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162247044926 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565297548829 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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