Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Rasing and giving valuable knowledge to children is never been an easy job inhumane history. Over the whole complexity of educating kids, I believe the current age is the most difficult time to educate children in both families and schools. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, there are too many distracting matters around our society these days. Many kids lose their intellectual power to concentrate since the smartphone, computer, internet and so on intriguing children's mind. Moreover, those cutting-edge devices have so many interesting features to lure kid's interest including video, music, pictures. To worsen the situation, so many contents that kids could touch with devices have a violent and sexual problem. My personal experience will be compelling evidence of it. When I was in high school, I got a smartphone for the first time in my life. It was a truly new world for me because I can contact my friends immediately and can enjoy funny videos via Youtube without any meddling. So, I spend too much time to use my new high-tech device resulted in a drastic decrease in my score in school. It was very difficult to quit using a smartphone because I had already addicted to it. After had had several times of professional therapies with doctors, finally I could get out from the maze of the smartphone. As I did in that time, kids on these days are also easily being distracted from high-end devices and have been suffered to escape.
Secondly, the old family system has been broken to raise kids together and to help parents with each other. In these days, we could easily found nuclear families do not have any other elder family members to help mother and father. Additionally, the rates of single-parent are increasing since the couple's divorces are dramatically increased. So, many parents these days have a sole duty to take care of their children, and it makes harshly difficult to educate children. For instance, in the past when the extended families still exist, whole members of the big family could have shared the duty of caring children. Kids were also could have learned the wisdom of life from elders, and it could give insights to kids to avoid conflicts and problems in their lives. Nowadays, however, to find asking a favor for caring children is almost impossible since traditional social cooperation customs are broken. Kids also do not have a beneficial source to get valuable life lessons without their parents, who sometimes too busy to even have small conversations.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that caring children these days are harder than ever before. Because we have too many distracting materials decreasing children's' ability to concentrate and we lose our social safety net to cooperate to the care of children together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 933, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...use I had already addicted to it. After had had several times of professional therapies...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96008403361 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67563193462 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552521008403 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5158729443 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.375 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129598588255 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388641766485 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387726634126 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861087040499 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179698258928 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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