At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
There are a lot of things to learn in the university including acedemic knowledge, researching skills, but social skills and ablities to maintaining healthy life is also important. Hence, I strongly support the idea that universities should invest equal amount of budget into social activities and health service. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will expore in following essay.
First of all, student's health is a necessary feature of academic success. Even one has enought passion about scholarly work in school, without healthy body condition he or she cannot focuse on their academic objectives. On this purspective, the ilness of students are not merely loss of individuals, but also loss of our society. Moreover, recent studies prove that students in these days do not know enough skills and methods to protect their health. Hence, teachig means that how to cultivating a sound body is a vital role of the school. My personal experience is a compelling evidence of it. When I was in universities, I lived with a roommate in the dormitory. I participated in the boxing club on a regular basis at that time, but my roommate does not have any physical schedule. In cold winter, my roommate got a cold and failed in final test since his body was quite weak. On the contrary, I could stayed in healthy condition and lived winter except any disease. If my roommate had workout with me, he could have maintain healthy life as me.
Secondly, the importance of sociall skills are getting increase nowadays. In these days, every people are required to be not only good at their professionals but also great at interactions. Even one has excellent working skills, if he did not know how to communiacte with his surbodinates and bosses, he will fail to achieve the company's objectives. For instance, I have two friends, one is great at work but always struggled to interact with others. On the contrary, another one is not good at work but has wonderful communication skills and a lot of charming points. After having a job in the society, first friend gets normal reputation in the company, but second friend makes a grand revenue and pomoted promptly. There are so many workers are goot at work, but few workers are good at communication, so one who has social skills get success more easily.
In conclusion, I truly believe that universities should pay equal attention and money to promote social evnts and phycal programs. It is beneficial for student's healthy life style and promising future aftee their graduation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 906, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'stay'
Suggestion: stay
...as quite weak. On the contrary, I could stayed in healthy condition and lived winter e...
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Line 2, column 1021, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
...mate had workout with me, he could have maintain healthy life as me. Secondly, the impo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91822429907 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76691058297 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556074766355 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8296505489 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5217391304 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6086956522 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52173913043 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136828407777 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037207685182 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627619375467 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100133121939 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610891860933 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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