At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
There are a lot of things to learn in the university including academic knowledge, researching skills, but social skills and abilities to maintain a healthy life are also important. Hence, I strongly support the idea that universities should invest an equal amount of budget into social activities and health service. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a student's health is a necessary feature of academic success. Even one has enough passion for scholarly work in school, without healthy body condition he or she cannot focus on their academic objectives. On this perspective, the illness of students are not merely losses of individuals, but also losses of our society. Moreover, recent studies prove that students these days do not know enough skills and methods to protect their health. Hence, teaching means that how to cultivating a sound body is a vital role in the school. My personal experience is compelling evidence of it. When I was in universities, I lived with a roommate in the dormitory. I participated in the boxing club on a regular basis at that time, but my roommate does not have any physical schedule. In cold winter, my roommate got a cold and failed in final test since his body was quite weak. On the contrary, I could stay in a healthy condition and lived winter except for any disease. If my roommate had a workout with me, he could have maintained a healthy life like me.
Secondly, the importance of social skills is getting increase nowadays. In these days, every people are required to be not only good at their professionals but also great at interactions. Even one has excellent working skills, if he did not know how to communicate with his subordinates and bosses, he will fail to achieve the company's objectives. For instance, I have two friends, one is great at work but always struggled to interact with others. On the contrary, another one is not good at work but has wonderful communication skills and a lot of charming points. After having a job in society, the first friend gets a normal reputation in the company, but the second friend makes a grand revenue and was promoted promptly. There are so many workers are good at work, but few workers are good at communication, so one who has social skills get success more easily.
In conclusion, I truly believe that universities should pay equal attention and money to promote social events and physical programs. It is beneficial for the student's healthy lifestyle and promising future after their graduation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...n the following essay. First of all, a students health is a necessary feature of academ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, except for, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87643020595 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78817528534 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530892448513 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0196064699 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.652173913 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132792483486 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366332065799 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611989874288 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996390418794 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607220402129 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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