Educational institutions should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general knowledge and subjects

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Educational institutions should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general knowledge and subjects.

Submitted by JHK on Thu, 03/05/2020 - 01:21

Some people would say that educational institutions should teach students about general knowledge and subjects. It’s original purpose of school and if school doesn’t do this role, there is no place to give academic knowledge. However, the world is changing and school should change either. Many people are focusing on more practical information such as careers and jobs, but school remains in the past and children cannot get satisfaction with school as much as we did. What should we do? Educational institutions should be a place for students to learn specific careers and jobs.
First of all, career education has become more important these days. The subject we’ve taught has been considered as something not effective. Many people need more practical and productive information in school. Furthermore, we’ve started to find our happiness in work life. Job is not a mean to just earn money anymore. Thus, people have had attention to their career and job. Educational institutions are good place to give children a chance to search and find their career and job. They have elaborate system and capacity to run programs for children’s careers and jobs. Of course, school should change, following the demand of society. School is a place to raise our future generation. We need to provide our children with more beneficial education to survive in the future.
Second, it can make schools more interesting places. These days, students might not consider a school fun. Decreasing interest in school can be followed by insufficient participating with school life for students. However, career education can make school more fun place and make students be interested in the subjects in school. It can motivate children to study either. For example, my cousin is first grade in middle school. He didn’t like to go to school because he was not interested in the subjects in school. But after he participated to the career program in school, he can decide to this future job and he started to find how he should do to realize his future job. He is more interested to subjects in school than before because he realized the reason he should study.

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Independent TOEFL Writing

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: ITS_JJ_NNSNN[27]
Message: Did you mean 'its original purpose'?
Suggestion: Its original purpose
...s about general knowledge and subjects. It’s original purpose of school and if school doesn’t do this...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, of course, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05898876404 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69329586817 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502808988764 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5966265605 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.2692307692 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6923076923 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88461538462 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25123360551 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774280017218 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104166541287 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191294114715 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814393946544 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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